衷心希望同學們能夠以此次一模為全新的起點，在查漏補缺的過程中不斷夯實知識根基，在自我調整的過程中輕裝上陣、奮勇前行。一定要始終保持耐心，堅守信念，要相信，每一滴揮灑的汗水，每一份付出的努力，都不會被辜負。期待在2025：今年夏天，在高考的賽場上，能夠親眼見證你們破繭成蝶，綻放出屬于自己的萬丈光芒！

同學們，二模加油

2025年4月北京市通州區(qū)高三一模英語

By my early 40s, I had exhausted all the hobbies that were supposed to make me feel better about entering middle age. And then, at the height of my low-grade desperation, I decided to 1 for a ballet class.

第二節(jié)（20 分）假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華，你準備參加學校下周舉辦的校園 “科技創(chuàng)意大賽”(Technology Innovation Competition)，請給你的外國朋友 Jim 寫一封郵件，內容包括：

1、說明舉辦大賽的目的；

2、介紹你的創(chuàng)意作品；

3、征求改進建議。

注意：1. 詞數 100 左右。2. 開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。

Dear Jim,

劉凱老師解析：

這是一個典型的書信作文任務，具備明確的情境（校園科技創(chuàng)意大賽）、寫信對象（外國朋友 Jim）、和具體要求（目的、創(chuàng)意作品、征求建議）。下面劉凱老師將從構思、內容設計、語言使用、段落結構、亮點詞匯和語法運用六個方面來為你全面剖析如何寫好這篇作文。

一、劉凱老師建議：構思指導（審題立意+結構規(guī)劃）

寫作目的

• 向外國朋友介紹即將舉行的科技創(chuàng)意大賽
• 介紹你參與的項目；
• 征求建議，體現交流和互動。

三段式經典結構

1. 開頭段：寒暄 + 引入話題（說明大賽目的）
2. 中間段：描述你的創(chuàng)意作品（突出“創(chuàng)新性”和“實用性”）
3. 結尾段：征求建議 + 表達期待（收尾呼應）

二、內容設計思路

1. 比賽目的（引出寫信原因）：

• To encourage students to develop creativity and apply technology in real life.
• To promote innovation and problem-solving skills among students.

2. 創(chuàng)意作品介紹（核心亮點）：

• 一定要是一個小而巧、有實用性和時代感的項目，比如：
• 智能花盆（smart plant pot）；
• 節(jié)能手環(huán)（energy-saving wristband）；
• 校園垃圾分類提醒系統(tǒng)（AI-based sorting reminder）；
• 語音識別的校園助手（voice-activated school assistant）；
• 描述時體現以下幾點：
• 功能（功能詞：can, is able to, is designed to…）
• 創(chuàng)意來源（短語：was inspired by…, I came up with the idea because…）
• 解決的問題（solve the problem of…, help people who…）

3. 征求建議（書信交流的核心）：

• 用委婉語氣表達“請給我建議”：
• I would really appreciate your suggestions.
• Do you think there’s anything I can improve?

三、句式與短語設計（巧妙用語）

劉凱老師總結：常用句式亮點（適合高考書信）：

• I’m writing to tell you about…
• I’m excited to share my idea with you.
• It aims to…
• It is designed to…
• I was inspired by…
• I’d love to hear your thoughts on…

四、劉凱老師講：三段結構寫作技巧

開頭段寫作技巧（引入自然，目的清晰）

例句提升：

• I hope this email finds you well!
• Our school is about to hold a Technology Innovation Competition to encourage students to explore creative ideas and practical solutions using technology.

亮點詞匯：encourage, explore, creative ideas, practical solutions

劉凱老師講：中間段寫作技巧（內容詳實，語言流暢）

例句模板：

• I’m planning to present a project called “Smart Plant Pot.”
• It is equipped with sensors that can monitor soil moisture, temperature, and sunlight.
• The system sends alerts to users' phones, reminding them to water or reposition their plants.

亮點詞匯：equipped with, monitor, sensors, send alerts, remind sb to…

劉凱老師講：結尾段寫作技巧（真誠得體）

例句模板：

• I wonder if you have any suggestions to improve it.
• Your advice would mean a lot to me.
• Looking forward to hearing from you!

亮點詞匯：suggestions, improve, mean a lot to sb, look forward to

六、劉凱老師總結提升建議

要寫好這篇作文，關鍵在于：

1. 表達清晰：三段清晰，層次分明；
2. 詞匯高級：使用科技類表達、書信語氣詞；
3. 語法規(guī)范：融合定語從句、非謂語、虛擬語氣等；
4. 內容真實：創(chuàng)意作品貼近生活，有實際意義；
   語言自然：不是翻譯腔，而是真正英文表達方式。
   

Dear Jim,

I hope everything is going well with you!Our school is going to hold a Technology Innovation Competition next week, aiming to inspire students' creativity and problem-solving skills through science and technology. I'm really excited to take part in it!
My project is a smart plant pot that can monitor soil moisture, temperature, and light levels. It connects to an app on your phone and sends reminders when the plant needs water or more sunlight. I got the idea because I often forget to water my plants, and I thought many people might have the same problem. I'd love to hear your suggestions on how to make it more practical or user-friendly. Any advice would be greatly appreciated!Looking forward to your reply.